Update source/2020-01-10-the-ember-times-issue-130.md

Co-Authored-By: Isaac Lee <[email protected]>

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 Almost all new work that gets done on the application is written with Glimmer components and in a clean and idiomatic Ember Octane way.
 
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-One of the biggest benefits the Outdoorsy team has experienced as a result of the Ember Octane upgrade is a simplified mental model of how Ember works and improved code readability and easier reasoning about what context state is derived from. Not having to reference several files to determine where a property is initially defined is definitely a boon to developer productivity.
+Some of the big benefits that the Outdoorsy team experienced from Octane are a simplified mental model of how Ember works, improved code readability, and easier reasoning about what context a state is derived from. Not having to reference several files to determine where a property is initially defined was definitely a boon to developer productivity.
 
 It’s great to hear that Octane is working really well in a production application at the scale and complexity of Outdoorsy’s.