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@@ -13,11 +13,11 @@ title: "Winning the 2023 FSC Machine Learning Data-Thon"
 
 ## I. Setting the Stage for Innovation
 
-The Third Annual FSC Machine Learning Data-Thon in 2023 was a significant event for zCore, attended by Michael Bastos, Director of Engineering, Michael Nau, Tech Lead in DevOps, MLOps, and DataOps, and CEO Erick Zenteno, emerged as part of the winning Team 3. All being military Veterans, they brought a unique blend of duty, dedication, and deep understanding of the VA's mission to the competition. Their military experiences have instilled in them a commitment to developing solutions that are not just technologically superior but also purpose-driven. The Data-Thon was more than a contest for them; it was a platform to offer meaningful solutions that resonate with the needs of fellow Veterans.
+The Third Annual FSC Machine Learning Data-Thon in 2023 marked a proud moment for zCore, with a strong showing from our company. Michael Bastos, our Director of Engineering and a military veteran, led Team 3 to victory as the Team Lead. His leadership was a crucial factor in the team's success. CEO Erick Zenteno and Michael Nau, our Tech Lead in DevOps, MLOps, and DataOps, also veterans, were there in support of the FSC challenge, demonstrating the company's commitment to the event. Their military backgrounds contributed significantly, bringing a sense of duty, dedication, and a deep understanding of the VA's mission. This experience informed their approach to developing not just technologically advanced solutions, but those that are genuinely purpose-driven. For zCore, the Data-Thon was an opportunity to showcase our solidarity and dedication, offering meaningful solutions that resonate with the needs of fellow veterans. The strong participation from the majority of our company highlighted our collective support and commitment to the cause.
 
 ## II. The zCore Spirit
 
-At the core of our ethos is a commitment to innovation, exemplified by groundbreaking solutions that transcend conventional boundaries. This commitment is not merely a guiding principle; it is the heartbeat of a vision that envisions a transformative landscape where technology serves and empowers Veterans in ways previously unexplored.
+At the core of our ethos is a commitment to innovation, exemplified by groundbreaking problem solving that leverage cutting-edge technical solutions and dynamic team leadership. This commitment is not merely a guiding principle: it is the core of a vision that transforms the services landscape where technology serves and empowers Veterans as our central focus.
 
 **Harnessing Cutting-Edge Technologies:** We embody a dynamic approach to problem-solving, where the team harnesses the power of cutting-edge technologies and science-driven analytics. This is about pushing the envelope of what's possible. Each solution we craft isn't just a product; it's a testament to the organization's dedication to pioneering advancements that redefine the possibilities in the field.